Saturday, 20 February 2010

The Train Of Love..Maybe- A Short Story

He turned around one last time to check if any of his office colleagues were out hanging at the pan kiosk. Finding none, he buttoned up his jacket and started walking towards the railway station in long strides. Meandering through the rows of pavement hawkers urging him to buy cameras, goggles or porn movies, he walked with a bounce amused and satisfied with himself. The boss was out and he managed half a day of leave by successfully convincing the deputy that he had a splitting headache. The industrious second-in-command had briefly looked up from the computer terminal and finding a face exuding small town sincerity, gave a sympathetic nod. It was not usual of him to play truant but the day was too cheerful to be spent behind a cubicle under the humming air-conditioner doing number crunching. In fact, the constant blow of cool air did numb his mind and for the last few days he had the urge to go out, hang his head in the sun and de-freeze the excel worksheets and project reports. Mumbai was experiencing an unusually cool winter this year. There was a nip in the air and a lazy sun overhead brought a philosophical detachment to anything distantly related to work. Around him, the city, which he only saw rushing to work early and dragging back home at night, looked totally transformed. Different sounds, different faces and an entirely different pace of life. As he reached the Terminus a stuffy stench of phenyl and wet towel entered his nostrils, a different stench indeed. The somber looking Mumbai local stood quitely resting under the rays of sun filtering through the tinted glass of the high-ceilinged heritage structure. It was minutes before it will come to life and roll on the rails to a relaxed journey to the suburbs. He walked up to the first class compartment, swung himself on the pole and landed on the train footboard. He then lazily shuffled himself to the window and spread out with a loud thump. Looking around, he found a goatee sporting college student armed with an I-pod, a couple of Gujju bhais engrossed in newspapers and an old gent wearing the whitest-of-white kurta pyjama. He leaned his head on the window and fixed his gaze on the time indicator, rolling his eyes waiting for the train to move. The indicator stuck the right time and as if something turned in its gut, the iron monster woke up to life and let out two shrill whistles. And in that interlude of whistles a swish of punk swayed into the compartment. The first thing he noticed about her were her shoes, which clip-clopped as she balanced herself on the footboard as the train rolled ahead. She then slowly walked up to a seat opposite him but a further away and quitely sat near the window. His eyes followed her little steps to the seat and then began moving further up slipping over her flawless white slender legs to meet a bunch of pink floral patterns on her skirt on her knees. In her hand she held a pink phone with earphones attached. As his eyes trailed the winding wire from her hand, through her bosom and up, he was met by a set of brown and dreamy eyes. The eyes looked through him and beyond. Totally disinterested in the occupants of the Mumbai local. As she kept her right elbow on the window edge and placed her chin on her open palm looking at the world rushing by, he knew it was a beautiful day and the path ahead held many interesting curves. The train meanwhile was happily rocking on the rails and with each rhythmic jerk he stole glances at her. She too was aware of the attention but was unyielding. What if this is really like in the movies?He would walk up to her and just generally strike a conversation on music or the phone model and they would get talking...Marine Line Station....he jumps frames. Walking on the Queen's Necklace promenade, her long fingers intertwined with his. She bends forward to look at him with eyes gleaming with the heat of a stolen kiss on the taxi and he pulled her close, her waist just fitting into the curve of his left hand. Grant Road Station. The goatee dude gets off here shaking his head like a rocker, one of the Gujju bhais folds up today's news and closes his eyes to catch some sleep while the other continues to work hard on the Sudoku. The whitest of white uncle had meanwhile starting falling over himself drifting into a snooze. The pink flower meanwhile is shuffling keys on her cellphone. She then closes her eyes and rests her back to the seat while crossing one leg over the other. Can she hear his thoughts? Lying on the floor with his face on her stomach, he nuzzles into her navel, making her giggle with tickle. He pins her down and digs his face into her heaving bosom breathing deeply her sweet scent. His hands starts moving on her slender legs as desire swells up but she in an instant pulls him by the hair. "No please....you know i have to be at home," Careless to her pleading, he starts nibbling on her neck till she falls back on the pillows living on small gasps between his bites. BOOM! An avalanche of noise shatters his foreplay as a random group of 15-year-olds make an entry into the compartment trampling his tender thoughts. He notices an inch-long frown go up on her forehead and disappear in an instant. She takes in the changed world in 7 seconds and shifts her gaze back to the rushing world outside. Where was he? One of the boys with long hair and a wise-guy smirk pulls his friend and whisperes something in his ear to which both of them rejoice in a loud laughter. The whisperer than stood up looking at the ceiling fans and sat across her while humming a un-musical tune. She pulls herself and moves closer to the window, her eyes fixed outside. The other lad meanwhile has reached the footboard and is leaning precariously outside the train trying to catch a glimpse of her at the window. He feels sick in the stomach. In two leaps he reached the train gate, pulls the acrobat by his shirt and lands a tight slap across his teenage face. A sudden silence fills up the compartment and he could see the Gujju bhais, the old uncle all awake and mouth agape. A ringing in the ears remain. The train too has stopped. The group of boys slowly deboard, while he continues to stand on the gate till the last one gets off. The one hit meanwhile is looking at him with fiery moist eyes and as the train revs up to go, with all his might, shouts - "Teri kya lagti hai behnchod?" (What does she mean to you sister-fucker?). He almost leaps out of the train with a matching expletive on his lips but gravity will just not let him go. He sees him fade away as the train leaves the station. He turns around to find the portrait in pink fiddling on the phone. She again casually gave a flip to her hair and continued to look outside the window as if she descended just now...totally unaware of the scuffle that took place 4-feet away from her. He stands there a few seconds longer and then walks up to his seat thinking - "Lagti kya hai? Kuch nahi behnchod?" (What does she mean to me? Nothing sister-fucker?). A smile goes up on his face and he folds up his arms, leans his head on the window, closes his eyes to slip into the arms of the rocking bogey cuddling him in his train of thoughts. And if the pink girl would have looked at him after a while. She would have seen her saviour, fast asleep...Smiling!

4 comments:

Kay Vee said...

Nice striking pic :)

I loved the end - the standoff with the urchin. Is the guy supposed to feel embarrassed knowing that the girl was witness to his fight with the urchin and his feelings were laid bare? I thought maybe you could've played up the 'being red-faced' part a bit. But I shud'nt really be suggesting how the story shud've been written, since its the way you see it.

Oh and I felt you could have gone bolder and straightaway written "porn flicks" instead of "persuading him to buy camera, goggles or X-X-X movies". Gives more effect.

It lost crispness at a few spots in between making the post appear longish, which it really is not.

But the story is beautiful because its simple and about a day in the life of a common man and his longings. Those were my two cents :D

Anonymous said...

I thought it was very well written! Just winters needs to be winter! I enjoyed that story nupur was short and simple unlike you!! He he

tunafish said...

The idea is so simple but so attractive. The unknown opportunity or tarnsformation if our paths bends from the staright line of the known... it is almost like poetry:
'Before you, there were shadows, longing.
After you the same.
Why do I then feel transformed?'
Nice one...

Amit K Gehlot said...

very nicely detailed.
I feel like doing a story board on this.